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I thought the dialogue was pretty easy to read. It felt very real. The whole story, though, seemed a little to quick for me. I like lots of narrative details ...

It's a lovely little faery tale. I think the objective point of view and tone were perfect. It is exactly what folk anf faery tales need. One thing I think ...

I think the way you opened this is much better than the last time. It does not seem like a stupid satire anymore. But once again, do we really need ...

Wasn't it forty-two? Anyway, this was pretty amusing, but it seemed to be lacking in something. Either the humour didn't hit me the right way, or it was not as ...

I agree. Very creepy. The whole thing felt very real. The tone of the narrative, and the characters' behaviours were so accepting of the idea of buying your death. I ...

My main problem with this is the rediculous rhymes. It seemed like you were just choosing any word that rhymed without worrying about how much sense it made. For example: ...

Karen slowly plodded down the stone walkway. Her breath blew out in foggy whisps, wavering in the air until her face pushed through it. Her hand was gripped tightly around ...

I think this is an excellent first draft. You could definitely turn this into a very interesting novel. There is the odd error, but nothing major. When you revise this, ...

Her essay was, as Imp said, unclear, and made generalizations that are unfair. Her terminology is also quite insulting and actually innacurate. She did not say "In the eyes of ...

I really don't think I understand what your intentions were with this or what the whole point of it was. What do these labels mean and why are you using ...

Talk about modern absurdism! Not my thing, but it was fascinating. I wasn't too fond of that opening, but since you did have a good reason for doing it, I ...

Impressive. Very intense. I like the fact that you recognize that this person is not a real goth. At first it bothered me because my brother is one. But then ...

I agree. I learned quite a bit from this essay. My knowledge of Christianity is somewhat limitted, and this explained everything very well in an easy-to-understand way why books like ...

Generally, I think the idea is to be yourself, not necessarily different. Then again, we're all different. However, for the most part, this could be much better. Try to be ...

Yeah, I'm with Snoink on this one. It's fine to keep in mind what people consider marketable, and very important to those who want to make a career as a ...