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Why did you putlines through so much of it? That made reading it difficult. I know a few people put negative comments about the parts after the diary entry, but ...

This strikes me as something that would work better written as a personal essay instead of with action and dialogue, particularly with the way you opened the story, telling us ...

Like Alex said, it's a wonderful piece and it's easy to imagine yourself in Holland when you read it. It's the kind of poem you really want to listen to, ...

Bjorn, we should have high expectations. I'd suggest perhaps expanding on this, and playing around with the ideas more. There really isn't much here for a reader to latch onto. ...

Guess what! I'm finally getting around to reading this. I'll be commenting on it one chapter at a time, though. My attention span is not so good. So here are ...

Well, guess I just get a "Congrats for trying." This was very impressive! You really expanded well on the original prompt. I see what CL means by Fern Gully on ...

Not too bad, once I knew what it meant. Though I'm not too sure if German is a good language for haiku. To my hears, German does not sound half ...

I like this. Doing author interviews for the site is a great idea. I'm sure the authors for Annick Press (a small Canadian publisher) would go for it. They're very ...

Yeah, this didn't get to me either. I need a reason to care, but there is none. Like Karma said, it was detatched. These are pretty high teenage emotions, and ...

This has some very powerful images, expressing the pain of war. I enjoyed reading it very much. I only have a few brief comments. In your first stanza, I didn't ...

A note to explain the poem is not even necessary, I think. There really is not much that can be said about this, considering why you wrote it. I just ...

Rosie, dear, if you want to enjoy being in this site, the attitude has got to go. Either say you are only posting it to share it, and don't want ...

You've got some very beautiful descriptions here, but it really is hard to read. I agree that it could use more dialogue, and maybe a little more action, to break ...

I'm not too sure if I liked the ending or not, but I think it did suit your purposes. This is pretty good. Could use some revisions, but I have ...

It seems like a skeleton of a beginning, like a detailed outline with the dialogue. It really needs more details, particularly visual. A slight, dark man sat in a corner, ...