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Red here! I'll admit that I haven't read your other chapters; I'm just trying to get in another review for review day :) However, I will have to go back ...

Three words: awesome, awesome, and awesome. :) This was really well written and an interesting subject as well. A couple of notes: When you first started, you talked about the ...

Red here! First of all, I loved the story. It was scary and disturbing (Like a horror story should be :) but without being cliché, which is awesome. I never ...

This is a really cute story! It's very unique, but not so different that it's confusing. Your entrance paragraph was very eye-catching as well. A few notes: The mom's speech ...

Great message, though I was wondering if this really belongs in essays. It seems more like a short story with a message to me. As thewritingdoc said, there are quite ...

Hey, Red here! Just thought I'd add a review to get this out of the Greenroom :) I loved all your suggestions, honestly, but here are my thoughts. I loved ...

One question, in the second to last line, did you mean to say "old old stories"? If so, it should have a comma between the olds. Other than that it ...

Really good rhythm, and interesting story. A couple technical comments: 1. No one does not need a hyphen. 2. "Which didn't let his thoughts to be unspoken" This is a ...

Love, love, love your descriptions. Very colorful, and very easy to picture. A few technical suggestions: "Mong Kok in Kowloon has been portrayed as the most notorious area in all ...

Loved the concept, but like smanske said, there was a Disney movie a lot like this. If it's heading somewhere different from the movie then cool, but you might want ...

I loved the message, but I had a couple technical suggestions. With the second verse, the last couple line are a little awkward with the added line. The rhyme scheme ...

Just to get this our of Green Room, I'll say the same as Kingofeli. This doesn't actually have nay text, just the copyright. And, just so you know, you don't ...

You had some really good descriptions for the rain. It looks like PenAndSword covered all the technical errors and things. I noticed the same sorts of things, a little odd ...

Very powerful. I love how you wrote from the Earth's perspective rather than in third person as most people do when talking about how we treat the Earth. I think ...

1. I think you can still drink orange juice. Unless it was an orange turtle, that's a whole 'nother issue. 2. I wouldn't. 3. Perhaps your dog just isn't highly ...