RayneChild

I didn't think it was unclear. I get it. This...creature...whatever the MC is, isn't human, and is trying to understand the ways of humans. Easy. Lol. Anywho, I think everyone ...

This was adorable! A great pleasure to read! :D Everything that I had noticed was said, so I don't have anything to pick on X) One of the things I ...

Hiya ^^ It totally makes sense now!!! I had picked out a couple things I didn't understand, and then I read the reviews and I found out that Avynn is ...

This was really deep, and dark, and kinda scary. Omg! You were finally deep! :D Woo! Lol. It was really descriptive, and I could see it all clearly in my ...

Hello again! I love how you made the transition from dark and mysterious to bright and somewhat uplifting. It was really funny ^_^ On to the critiquing! I groaned and ...

Wow, this was pretty good! I liked the suspense and the mystery vibe. Here's what I found: The phone trilled again; a hollow screech in an other words hollow house. ...

Hello there! :) I'm glad you finally got a little more detailed as to who the boy is. It really sets the story in motion. Very good! There were a ...

This was really interesting! I enjoyed it! It had a hint of suspense to it, kinda that fear aspect. All in all it was pretty good. Mostly, I just noticed ...

I like it! :D Poor Dem...What happened to me?! Lol. And why is Osoroshii gone? And where is she? So many questions!!! *gasp!* Lol. I can't wait to read the ...

Oh, wow! This was amazing! Really, really good. Your word choice was phenomenal; I had a vivid picture in my mind the whole time. It was like a movie...! I ...

This was fantastic! I loved it! Like a few other people mentioned, there is no setting for this story. When I read it, I though of 18th century London-ish, but ...

...Wow. That really WAS scary!!! I could see everything in my head; it was all a vivid picture. Even the arm and where it had been torn off. It was ...

Okay, well, Anijumper got most of them, so I'll just do the rest: Stopping at the front of the school under the plat formed roof protected from the cold beating ...

Wow! This was really good! For a moment there, I forgot that it was only the prologue! It has so much detail and so much info (in a good way) ...

I thought it was wonderful! I think everything flowed very well together, and the storyline so far is very good, in the way that the reader knows the fantasy aspect ...