RavenBlack

Oh also, what words do you use in a 3rd person POV. How would I know if I was going off track?

Thanks for the review. Glad you pointed out some of the key points about Damon and Ivy :-D I decided to change the relationship between Ivy and Belial in this ...

Thank you for the review. I always seem to have a probably with the POV I'm using and never seem to notice when I change it mid chapter. Thanks again

xD Okay thanks for clearing that up. :-D

I suggest not dramatizing it. If as you said she has a cold, why does her son's coach need to look after her. Hope this helps :-D

Thanks for the review. I thought the action wouldn't work, glad yo liked it. I am not usually good at writing action scenes but it seems to have worked this ...

Thanks so much for the review. I really enjoyed writing this chapter because of the action and Belial and Valafar. Thanks for pointing out the viewpoint problem I keep forgetting ...

The reason I named it random was because I deleted what was previously here because I didn't know how to delete it. Sorry for the confusion :-)

The reason I named it random was because I deleted what was previously here because I didn't know how to delete it. Sorry for the confusion :-)

The reason I named it random was because I deleted what was previously here because I didn't know how to delete it. Sorry for the confusion :-)

Thanks so much for the review. I re edited the story recently, so I fixed it up a bit. Forgot that i did should've mentioned it

Thanks so much. I thought that her reactions seemed a bit of, I couldn't put my finger around it. I remember I wasn't satisfied with it.

Oh okay. Thanks for clearing that up. It must have been really hard to write this.

Guess who's back, back again. Raven Black's back, tell a friend. (I'll stop now...) Anyway I'm back to read the edited version. I though you rewrote it somewhere else but ...

Thanks for the review. I edited it today, you can read it if you want. Would really appreciate the help :D