RatchetWriter

Sweet story... 8) Okay, that aside I have to be helpful now. The first thing is the long block of writing needs to be broken up, I've a suggestion or ...

I just maniacally love how smart the plot always is, the Eternity Code is amazing! The second thing that is great is the character development. So superb you can almost ...

Hey, Pretty good work! I saw no grammar mistakes, and the way it is read, it could almost come right out of Redwall. Simply said though, before this piece, some ...

Very intresting! I've never played the game, so that made it funner to read. Vocabulary was nice, the words were very epic and intro-like. Let's see.... each paragraph was written ...

Good description! A few minor typos: She had just enought time, she thought, allowing herself a small smile. And he watch her go. I'm thinking you meant - and he'd ...

The rhythm was so good I conducted it with my hand. :smt038 The one bit has been torn up, and the only other thing I see is Courage, christened David ...

Nice! I went back to your other start, and I actually like it better, but anyway... This section was well written. The characters felt real, and the ecitement and kindness ...

Hey, look who finally got around to reading this. :oops: Well, I haven't got help, just an opinion. Personally I love the races, and how they talk so far, the ...

Very nice! I'm studying eygpt right now, so that made it even more intresting. One place is confusing, however, it looked like just a small mistake. This reaction would make ...

Hmm. My usual starting line. Well I think that it's great. For starters. And for enders it's a little hard to follow. I got it, I just had to slow ...

Wow... Well I thought that while the description flowed great and was clear, it was just under having too much. But that's not a bad thing. It's not too much. ...

HAHAHAHA!!!!!! Oh this is hilarious! I was thinking about how many people are addicted to Harry Potter, oh no, I feel the pull to! AHH!!! So funny. Hmm... for helpfulness, ...

Hmm... Well about all I can say is I like it. I don't want to be annoying and simply say that, but I can't think of anything wrong. Um... I ...

Ah.... Very Nice! I don't think anything needs to be done to it, my personal opinon. As for which is better... Well the first I kind of like better, but ...

Oh nice! All the plot ideas and things swirling all over the place. This story could go lots of directions! I'm looking forward to which way it will go though. ...