Rascalover

Thanks for the suggestions :)

Thanks so much for the great reviews :) I do realize im not putting as much emotion and detail in it as I should and I am working on it. ...

Thanks for the feedback:)

Thank you for such an awesome review! i will work on it some more. See the thing is i have already written this piece of work which has about 15 ...

Thanks :) I like your avy too!

It hinting at a love affair between Gary and isabella at the end. so maybe

Thank you so much! I'm glad I've changed your mind maybe ahah.

Yes I did write this pretty carelessly, my bad :) Thanks for the reviews Ill havew more up soon hopefully

Actually it's kind of a flashback because when chapter one starts it's later in their lives sooo.... is it still good that way? I dont know I have never written ...

Awesome, once again thanks and I will let ya know bout that

Nice review Jon It's awesome. And yes i will correct thos thing. i thought I would reather put this in the romantic fiction section instead because besides using their names ...

Thanks so much for your guy's wonderful reviews! And Winter wow, that helps alot. See i used a theasuras(sp) and thats where most of the wrong words came from ahah.

Like Knightlyangel09 said this was very impactful and the changing of the nursery rythmes was amazing awesome job!!!

Awesome poem. It was very creative and good for a first start. warder I dont think this word fit well here. Try to come up with some thing to help ...

To take out the appropriate time to review your work I'll probably qwait until after christmas to do my critque