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Re: Time Skips
My gosh. I think I'm about to cry. Honestly. This is amazing. I'm trying to find something to review here because I'm trying to get back into reviewing, but this ...
Jan 13, 2013 -
Re: The Man in Maroon
Hello there! I am Ranger, and I come seeking the honor of reviewing this fine work. *bows* I'd like to start by saying that I really enjoyed this. (Especially because ...
Jan 13, 2013 -
Re: The Rage (Very rough, rough draft) Chap. 2
Hello! This is the most recent post as of now, so this is a review of the entire novel so far. First of all, I just want to be clear ...
Apr 4, 2012 -
Re: Judas Chapter 1
Hello there! This is a good start, but I think that there are a couple elements that could be improved just to make the reading easier. I don't have much ...
Mar 30, 2012 -
Re: A short scene from my book
Hello there! I really like the idea and plot of this, and the characters, but I think you should show more, not tell. Right now, you seem to mostly be ...
Dec 14, 2011 -
Re: A Four Letter Word Called Hope
Hi there! This is really good! You have a great way of adding little details in the story that make it personal - little flashbacks and memories that make the ...
Dec 2, 2011 -
Re: I'm Not Asking You To Cry At My Funeral
Aww.... this is really sad. (As in good-tragic sad, not really-lame-writing-sad.) I almost cried. Someone did a monologue on cancer in my theatre class, and this reminded me of it ...
Dec 2, 2011 -
Re: Treehouse
There's something about this that's so bouncy and warm and soft at the same time! I love it. It sort of reminds me of Bridge to Terebithia. I'm not really ...
Nov 2, 2011 -
Re: The Heart of an Animal
This is beautiful! I loved it! I'm not really sure how I can help here... except maybe your paragraphing. Every time a new character speaks, it needs to be a ...
Nov 2, 2011 -
Re: A Hand to Hold - A 7/7 memorial
“MIND THE GAP.” I remember that from my vacation to London! :D I actually bought a t-shirt there that says "mind the gap" on it. And I even recognized where ...
Sep 21, 2011 -
Re: A Fire For Geno
Hello there! Welcome to YWS! :) I have to say, this is definitely the shortest piece I've read on here, but I like your style. *clears throat* And now I ...
Sep 17, 2011 -
Re: Flying
Nice! I remember I watched some footage of 9/11, and when I heard all these bangs, I thought it was the steel supports giving. Then I was told that it ...
Sep 12, 2011 -
Re: In Memoriam
I don't remember where I was - I was four (as you've probably figured out), and my mom didn't tell me. But my grandmother was in the Pentagon when it ...
Sep 11, 2011 -
Re: Unheard Screams- a 9/11 Memorial
This is amazing! I noticed only two major problems with the plot. First of all, the South Tower was the first one hit, not the second; secondly, the North Tower ...
Sep 9, 2011 -
Re: I Wanted to Change My Name
So pretty! I'm no poet, so I don't really have a review - not that I could come up with one anyways! You know, I have a really common name... ...
Sep 4, 2011