RainWanderer

*Bow* Thank you for your insights, and your lesson on the usage of ellipsis, Kyousuke-sensei. This person will forever remember your generousity.

Thanks for all the grammatical mistakes point-out. If only I was born as an English speaker, this would never happen. But I am not, and I have to burden you ...

Thank you for helping me with all that nitpicks. I am quite bad at such a meticulous process, so I appreciate your assistance. There is only one thing that i ...

I am a person who likes to abuse repetition. I want to make my character sounds like a Popsicle maniac. Everything in his mind must have "Popsicle! Popsicle! Popsicle"! That, ...

Thank all of you for the responses. I will take your advices and try to work better on the next one! Oh and, Ranger Hawk ,the repetitive of "the book" ...

Ahh, but there are two kind of emotional when you having sex. Either ecstasy or extreme guiltiness, since "s" in "sex" also stands for "sin". Because Cameron is still a ...

I knew we should spent more time on this...I could polish it more...

We need to think of a title!!!

Thanks for reading to this part...I thought no one want to read this...well, I updated it with my more recent version of the story, describing more about the meeting of ...

*facepalm* I knew that I should have do my homework more...I am ESL, you see...but that is no excuse. Thanks for pointing my errors out. Have been such a long ...

You should post this in a writing thread to get feedback, not the randomness where everything just don't make much sense, Randomness is just for fun.

Whoa...I didn't see that. Can't believe I missed such an obvious mistake... And again, about the cake, please read the next part... maybe I should rewrite the conversation between Titani ...

Thank for the reviews! >WhiteTigy I see what you mean, I will look more into it and pump in more description! About the grammatical errors, it might be easy for ...

Thanks a lot for the review! I am sorry for a long post, but it is supposed to be a short story so I don't want to separate it out. ...

Thanks! =D I know I fail at grammar, because I am not an english speaker, but I will try my best to fix it!