Quetseli

Oh, its a lovely song. I like it! I can almost hear the guitar in the background. X3 I think it's a lovely song about a girl cherished by her ...

This is good! Has a a lot of suspense in it, which is good if you like to get readers wanting more, because I want to now more already. X3 ...

It's a lovely poem! Really sweet. I like the ending where it turns to a happy but suspicious note. If the title is pending I can give you a title, ...

This is well written! the only mistake I found was at the end where you said "braking glass" instead of "breaking glass". But other then that, you described things well ...

Its a good start I'll tell you that. I'm not the best a poetry, so someone may coming in correct anything I missed. X3 But just remember that poems don't ...

That was a very interesting chapter. The end was surprising and you can tell now where he lost some of his insanity. It's good, but I believe you need to ...

I think it's a wonderful poem. It sound like you're describing the flaws of humanity in a way. But if you were to continue, say something about hidden truths or ...

You did much better in this chapter! You described things and let your character think more deeply, and it helped more with the mental image. Good job! Now, the only ...

I think it's fine. The only thing I would work on is to be more descriptive about your characters and their surroundings. It would help the mental image and probably ...

It's so sad. :( But it's a wonderfully done story. Great job! I would only sugest that you maybe put this in a letter like way. Like it can start ...

That was great! I loved how you used the "Why so serious" in there. That was clever. X3 The only thing I would say is to describe your characters and ...

That was good! The only thing I would say is when other people are speaking, press the "Return" or "Enter" button so it's on another line. You crowded the conversations ...

It's well done! Lovely work! You should go back though and capitalize letters and correct some words that I saw. Words that had a different meaning then the one you ...

It good! I like how you're going back and forth between the characters, if that's what you are trying to do. X3 Again, you could describe things a little deeper, ...

This is well done piece of work! The only thing I would suggest is to slow down it your writing. You seem to speed up to get to something more ...