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for what it's worth: look, if i blathered on [honestly] about myself for 230 words, i'd be shut up or shot. from this poem, you're not any more interesting than ...

capitalize the second word in the poem. sorry. it was bothering me. other than that... add another stanza. it ends abruptly, which could be fine if it worked, but here ...

"Iv deleted this text coz like bubble wrapped said...not good to post your name, and also it WAS a school assignment, my stuff isnt that good but i am only ...

well there's not much that was left out by bubbles and lillizard, but one of my major problems was this poem, coming from someone with a whole host of issues ...

the title and the idea are both amazing. "to combat the slow decay of reminiscence, so that I may kill myself with something tangible" was also very well done. however. ...

1. harry are you kidding me? eragon is... annoying. i am really trying not to swear here. paolini is just an awful writer and his characters are flat... maybe the ...

uhhhhh lotr movies are f'in awesome. books? unreadable. i only every made it to chap 10 of fellowship. hp movies, blow, though, but the books are amazing. did you just ...

a) this poem is amazing. cute (as in a good thing) and professional at the same time. very well-done. write more soon. b) Wars just words torn in a cloud ...

i agree with all above, and i think (but i just type 'thinked', so i don't know if you should trust me) that you did just the right amount of ...

i hate vampires and romance. but my god i love this book. i have it and new moon on an alter in my room and pray to it every time ...

the subject matter bugs me, but from a relatively objective point of view: a) everything above b) about the line, 'the war you have found'; it sounded to me like ...

Thanks for your crit. I JUST got your Alaska joke(I'm kind of slow at times). Lol, Alaska's not as cold as people think, not where I live, anyway. It can ...