PsychicNinja

Muffin, he lost Mara! You'll only get this if you've read Sacrifice.. Omg, Alanna..this seriously made me cry! It's so great..you really capture the essence of Mara, and what she ...

Yay! I really like this next part! The description is good, and the characters are evolving nicely! It's way better than the first chapter! Keep it up. I did notice ...

Hey Ariel! I like the story so far. It sounds like Harry Potter combined with Lord of the Rings. Which I guess is a good thing. I think you could ...

Ok! I haven't read the other parts, but it sounds really good! I love the emotion you put into your characters! I also like how you described the assailant. Very ...

Hey Squallz! Well..I finally got time to read this... I really like the description. It really good! I think it sets up a good story. But it didn't really capture ...

Hi Squallz! I actually watched the first episode of the new series. I think you did a much better job! I really like the emotion, and how you portrayed Dawn's ...

Ok... It's pretty good, Greg. You have lots of grammar errors. *shudders* Sorry.. I guess I kinda caught my attention, but compared to how the prologue sounded, it was a ...

Hi Greg! I'm going to read some of your stuff now! The prologue is very interesting and it catches my attention! :D :D It's a little confusing at times, but ...

Good job, Ethan! I really liked it! Just a few things: 1)There are a few grammar errors and spacing errors, but I think the other people pointed them out. 2)I ...

Yay!! I finally got to read this, Lyn! This is a really good dramatic prologue. I look forward to reading more! It leaves you in suspense. I could write more, ...

Hi Audra! Okay this next part... Well just a few things: It was really good. I think it breaks up the tension between Emi and Ayumi. Good character interplay there. ...

You need to PM when you post this!! I almost missed it!! :D :D :D :D Well, I really like this latest part! (And it's short :D ) I have ...

yay! This sounds great! I can't wait to read the next part! PM me with it! Anyways, a few things.. I forgot to mention this on the last one: You ...

I love it, Audra! I love the different techiniques you show! It kinda all sums up the techiniques they developed! Ya know...I think next time I'll just skip over all ...

Okays! Hello Ash! I have come to crit!...but there's no point in repeating what others have said on the grammar stuff (i don't really like criting that). But the story ...