Priceless

Hi there, I’m wallowing in my sadness. This didn't fit in with the rest of the piece, for me. Cause everything else sounded beautiful and poetic, but this sentence sounded ...

Hola, I finally felt secure. I revelled reveled in this new feeling of freedom and aspiration. My life was ahead of me and it was important! All the parts that ...

Hey there! Jeremy's POV! Jeremy's POV! OMG I'm so happy I got to get into his head, he's my favorite of all of them. :) Ah-hem. Back to the review. ...

Hi there! I liked this part too. :) It was well written. I especially liked the end parts where they spoke to God. Sigh. This shouldn't be italics. You don't ...

Hey there! Me again! :D I liked this! :) It was cute, the whole family, sibling thing. I liked the diary entry, that was so realistic and cool. :) But ...

Hi there!! :) It should be 'Prologue' instead of 'Prolouge'. Charlie Johnson rushed his wife Abigail to St. Francis Memorial Hospital in Columbus Georgia. Their 3 year old twins Jasper ...

Hiya, I'm a bit confused. Maybe I'm missing something, but if it's a poem, shouldn't it be in one of the poetry forums? Or if it's not, if it's a ...

Hey there! Um..shouldn't you censor the title? Cause everyone can see it? I like the story so far, it looks pretty interesting. You've grabbed my attention with the whole old ...

Hi there!! I agree with 567ajt. To me, things are happening just a little too fast. I mean, they might end up talking in the next chapter, right? Then? I ...

Hi there! This was awesome, beautifully written. I loved the way you told us how Brian felt; I really got into his head and felt for him. It's like I ...

Hola, But those times when I got caught sleeping, I picked the fruit wallpaper off the lime green walls. I didn't understand this sentence. That was all I noticed, otherwise ...

Hi there, I really liked this. It was amazing! Your description of her pain was like wow. Very well-written, awesome job. Just a few nitpicks: Perhaps it has become a ...

Hi there! Once I was in a relationship where… Poor thing. Stupid me. I’d approached the situation with sympathy, telling him it wasn’t his fault. And he’d come up with ...

Hi there, Okay, this is just my muddled-up opinion, but the description was uneven to me. It's like, you started the story in a general, telling-not-showing kind of way, that ...

Hey, Really nice work. I didn't see anything wrong with it. It was very interesting. He saw his friends enjoying university while he planned to fight Admiral Periodic Table, Captain ...