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Pretzelsnow doing a review for you today: I really liked this essay that you wrote.I relate to childhood characteristics because I was a child and I have four younger siblings. ...

I really liked the suspense in this short story. We got thrown right into the action of murdering someone when Aniya starts to run for her life. I like the ...

All right to start out with I really like that you made the point that Philisia's Sibles family was poor. You mentioned that in your first page or so and ...

I liked that you gave the readers a sense of the hateful and horrible relationship that existed between Rufus and the rest of his family. I could see clearly that ...

I really enjoyed your descriptive imagination at the beginning. I can personally relate to that because I love to use my imagination. I like how descriptive you were and that ...

1.I was wondering if you did a prolouge to this story.I would strongly reccomend doing so. Also,while reading this and while you are writing this I want you to decide ...

1.I see two mistakes in one sentence that I will point out: ". The goonie on the roof was the one who liked to polish its fingernails in birdbaths brimming ...

one of your sentences you have connected a word that needs to be two separate words: ". From what she had been told about the moonstar." Separate moon star into ...

I personally think that this is way too short to be considered a chapter therefore I might not be able to do my full 10 point review as I always ...

1.Please don't use the word damn in this sentence:"Damn, people here are just weird." If it is offensive to me it will surely be offensive to other readers. 2.I saw ...

this sentence:"He said that you truly horrified to be partnered with— him— And I believe him. But this, Andromeda, what were you thinking?" You capitalized the and when it needs ...

I will do a review of grammar for you since you wrote that you didn't edit the future though I would strongly advise for you to edit it at least ...

1.The first mistake that I saw right off the bat was in this sentence: "“You clothes,” he said as he handed the bag to her," The first word, you should ...

1. In this sentence: "that was way to small for her and a purple leotard" I see this mistake in a lot of writers and chapters and I have to ...

Since the review before me focused on the grammar I will focus on the content: 1.I like the conversation between Juliet and the girl. I was very insistent and full ...