PrehistoricEchoes

I actually wrote the first draft of this after finishing a couple episodes of SAO at the behest of a friend. I liked the idea of people being transported to ...

Thanks for reviewing! Helpful as always! From this, I think I need to make what happened a bit clearer, since the main crux of the story is that these two ...

I'll do some work with the perspective shifts. I can definitely see where you're coming from with this. I was trying to do an easy "camera pan" if you will ...

Thanks for reviewing! The "Show don't tell" problem seems to crop up a lot no matter how I open this story. Perhaps I should start experimenting with other openings again. ...

Reminds me of the Two Steps From Hell song, "Stay:" Not a bad poem. Wouldn't review it, but I "like" it. Heh, see what I did there?

Hey, so I know it's been nearly a year since you did this review, and you might not even remember doing it, but I've been rewriting the story and using ...

If you're looking for a beta reader then, sign me up! This has been a good story, and it'd be a shame to not see the conclusion.

I would write a review, but I'm not a poetry guy and I'd probably just end up spouting Dragonheart references...

This gives me a good idea on how to rewrite the chapter and showcase some of the characters better as well...

This gave me a good idea on how to reopen the chapter, and it'll help showcase some of the characters' traits better as well. I find it funny that you ...

This gave me a good idea on how to reopen the chapter, and it'll help showcase some of the characters' traits better as well. I find it funny that you ...

This gave me a good idea on how to reopen the chapter, and it'll help showcase some of the characters' traits better as well. I find it funny that you ...

Again, religious people can be ignorant. So can the scientific. Ever listened to Richard Dawkins or Christopher Hitchens? They're so convinced that they're right, they don't consider any other alterna

Just thinking about something...could people still reinvent electricity in this setting? I mean, if steam power works, it wouldn't be long until they have working generators again.

Thanks for the review! I can understand what you said about not remembering the opening... I'll try to make them have more meaning to the story more in the next ...