Poltergiest

I really liked it, surprisingly better then chapter one to be honest. For some reason I had a strangely clearer picture of him in my head though you only described ...

Hmm... Firstly, I was put off by there not being a title, its better to come up with one so people know waht to except before reading. Well, firstly I ...

Gotta tell ya, I was a little put off to reading this, mainly because of the tittle. But I found myself pleasently surprised. You introduced some really good characters, and ...

Well, it wasn't the worst begining to a series I've ever read. :D Oh geez, firstly I wouldn't hold off the mention of the main characters name for so long, ...

Another great addition. I'm not much for grammatical errors so here I go an the few holes in your story. I thought the Pixie thing was exceedingly random. I'm fine ...

:D It rules. I like how theres a definate plot now but I wish it was longer. That being said I really don't know what else to say, sorry... Post ...

Wow, that was really good. The descriptions of the characters were extremely well done, about thier physical appearance and thier personalities. I've heard of someone turning different shades of red ...

I thought it was really good! I would have liked it more if you had described the abandoned city more (for those of us who have never been to New ...

If you ment this to be a funny spin off of The Lord of the Rings you did a good job, but if not then thats just not cool. You ...

Interesting. There were very many well written parts of the story, how you described the night sky, the consuming forest and so on. The characters didn't seem to have much ...

Wow. This is reeeeally good. I couldn't find many gramatical errors or anything but if this is a story I would introduce characters, plot, so on and so forth. I ...

Horay! Another one! Ahem. Uh, first of all, CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT! I mean, thats what just happened. We're getting to know alot more about Philip which is good cause he's kinda ...

Brilliant! (and I only talk like a brit when I"m reeeeally happy :roll: ) This was amazing! I agree with Gadi about the Demonic Toast from Hell. ^_^ This poem ...

Yay! Another one! ^_^ Okay, um... I think you're writting style is definatly coming out in this part more than the last one. The battle scene was accually pretty well ...

Yay!!! (Not really sure why it's called Under the Mountian yet but, you don't know why mines called Pure Magic, so...) I liked it. A bit of an info dump ...