Plus-One

Hey thought I'd drop by with a little review. As always: take what you like and discard what isn't helpful! :) I think you've done a really good job of ...

Hello Grey, first of all: welcome to YWS. Second of all: great little piece you have here. When I started reading this, I saw the marks in the cement as ...

So I made it to the end... I really like the story. I can really feel the emotion on it and the journey of the boy, but I think with ...

Hello there, a review for a review... I mostly sought this out because I was curious what you might have found relatable in the things I wrote. And from reading ...

Hello Kat, I have my review prepared. I warn you that it is long, but a fair portion of it is correcting minor grammar errors or typos. So here we ...

Hello again, I'm glad you posted your story up in sections in the end! :) Anyway, I have a few more nitpicks than everyone else! But hopefully they will be ...

Hello! You were asking for critiques in the chat yesterday, and I finally got around to doing it! XD Here it goes, I'll start off with bits of grammar and ...

Hello, Plus here! (Or whatever you want to call me! :D) Firstly, just a few little grammatical things I picked up! : At the moment the words came out of ...

Hello, I will go through my little corrections first, I seem to have quite a few, but I might have just been being pedantic... xD It was an alien feeling ...

Hello, I think I found a couple of other little tweaks... In front of me lightening lit up the sky lightening ---> lightning Also, as someone else mentioned, I thought ...

Hmm...I liked it overall, but I still find certain parts of it a bit hard to believe or imagine... I'm not sure some of the names are entirely believable, 'Timmy' ...

Wow, you did really well to keep that in the appropriate narrative voice! Though, I feel you might be able to tweak the first couple of paragraphs to flow better, ...

That's probably the best bit of writing, I've read in a while! You didn't overdo the humour, so it still seemed believable! ;) I want some of your ability! xP ...

Well I haven't read anyone else's critiques, but i'm here to offer my humble advice! As a male who frequently writes things from a females point of view, i feel ...

-salutes- Reporting for duty! mustache ... Hmm I could have sworn it was moustache, but I was wrong! xD Anyway, all that's really left to say is that it was ...