PiesAreSquared

Hey, I’m doing this because of review day. I don’t usually review...but now i do. You have spelling errors and some other miscellaneous mistakes, but other than that it is ...

I like this story, it’s very descriptive, and very entertaining, although there is room for improvement. We wait at the gas station for what feels like ages, then start looking ...

Hey, this is a great story. You should not write in present tense as it is harder to read. Overall very good, but there is some grammar mistakes here and ...

I stared into the night sky and pondered life on earth. Why are we here? Who should we aim to please? In the end i guess it doesn't matter, we ...

Hey, nice story here...great description. A white wolf with blue eyes like ice, You could say “A white wolf with ice-blue eyes”. Her monstrous fangs dug deep into the flesh ...

Interesting, but there are some mistakes here. Her back hit the cold painted wall, pressed on the bed, against the wall and between him. This sentence should be broken up ...

Hey, nice poem here, at the end of the third line, the word disappear should have an s at the end. This would not only add to the rhyme, as ...

Hey, great setting, but... After one more scrutinizing glance you should have made Nurse Suh throw scrutinizing glances earlier in the story before writing “after one more”, Her supple body ...

This is a great story but I would like to point out some things, lightyears lightyears is not a word, it is light-years, the black branches linked and melded together, ...

Her eyes glint coldly in malice A great piece of poetry, if i am to be a judge of poetry. Maybe for this line you can put "her dark eyes ...

and they became burnt out bulbs. (Meant to be that the stars seemed like burnt out light bulbs in the sky... couldn't word it correctly. Any thoughts?) burnt out light ...

Is this a Novel? I as because there is a "chapter one" near the top. if it is a novel, it should be posted in the "historical fiction novel" section, ...

Okay, Let me say this, your writings are better than mine, but they're still not good enough “You cannot yet go back, Artem. You never even said goodbye.” Ok, This ...

How far would I go for you? Maybe I’ve become immune The clock in my mind is set to June Who knew? Nature dies and seasons change Lives crumble and ...

You used to be my dearest friend, The one I told my secrets too. I thought we'd always be together, You used to be the one I loved, The one ...