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  • Short Story » General, General Re: Why?

    I've edited it, and further critiques are not only welcome, they're begged for. To answer some questions: spirits means alchohol. It's just a fancy way of saying it. Also, the ...

    Mon Mar 17, 2008 4:02 am
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Why?

    Thanks for the critiques guys! I'll edit it ASAp (I'm using the free computer in the hotel lobby right now), and I promise I'll take it all into consideration! A ...

    Fri Mar 14, 2008 9:33 pm
  • Other » General, General Re: sermon

    Hi! Okay, friends over right now, and they're using spare comp. to type some semblence of a critique, which I'll PM to you. Bye!

    Sun Mar 09, 2008 8:08 pm
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Ghost of the Prophecy

    Thanks for the reviews! I've got another part written, so I'll probably post it this weekend if I'm not too busy!

    Tue Feb 26, 2008 1:47 am
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Lyla. Part 7

    Not that there's anything really wrong, but, why doesn't anyone oppose the keeping the baby option? It just seems like it'd be more natural that way. That's all I have ...

    Mon Feb 25, 2008 4:43 am
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: The Life and Times of Miss Aurora Beaumont (and friends)

    everyone's already said what there is to say about the edit, but I'll put my bit in anyway! Love Aurora, she's not the typical boring princess who requires rescuing, and ...

    Sun Feb 24, 2008 10:01 pm
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Ghost of the Prophecy

    Thanks! Anybody else reading this, feel free to crit. I can't decide whether or not I want to continue this storyline.

    Sun Feb 24, 2008 9:46 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Dawn

    Uh, cool prologue! I'm not sure what the thing with the magicians is about, but then again, prologues are for leaving questions so that you read more to get answers! ...

    Fri Feb 22, 2008 7:43 pm
  • Article / Essay » Review, General Re: Any1 ever heard of The Edge Cornicles

    My brother read them first, and while I didn't love them, they were a passable read for a rainy weekend. Or an airplane. But Garth Nix, Tolkein, and Dave Barry ...

    Tue Feb 19, 2008 3:54 am
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Be My Anti-Valentine

    Interesting poem. I like the perspective, although I'm sad to say my Daddy would too. (anti-relationship before 35 much?), but your poem's just really good. Although you do seem to ...

    Mon Feb 18, 2008 9:32 pm
  • Short Story » General, General Re: In the Land of the Purple Monkeys

    That was pretty good. It seemed sort of like a bizzare African retelling of the Three Little Pigs, but with monkeys and tigers instead. It also sort of seemed like ...

    Mon Feb 18, 2008 8:04 pm
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Land of Sky, Land of Rain (Chapter Three)

    Loved it. Somehow the slightly cynical and sarcastic tone reminds me of a good friend of mine, which makes me feel as though I'm really seeing the story from Emma's ...

    Mon Feb 18, 2008 5:23 pm
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Really Short Short Story

    Did you base this partly on the book "City of Ember"? The plot seems similar.

    Mon Feb 18, 2008 4:37 am
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Untitled

    Well, I know it's certainly been a while since you wrote this story, but I'd like to let you know that I really like it. It sort of feels like ...

    Sun Feb 17, 2008 11:48 pm
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: By The Light Of A Silver Candle

    I loved the story. The ending seems a little chopped off, and I'd like to have a little more detail, but this has got the makings of a good short ...

    Sun Feb 17, 2008 7:23 pm


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