Philosopha

Thanks for the feedback and I'm glad you have taken such a close look. Rhyming is a tricky business indeed :P

Thanks for the feedback :) I really appreciate it ;)

Thanks for the feedback :) I really appreciate it ;)

Thanks, that means a lot :)

I appreciate the review, criticism or not. :) Thanks for the read.

Thanks for the review. That line you mentioned being a tongue twister is more of a personalized line, being that it may feel out of context to someone else. "Persistence ...

Thanks for the feedback :) I'm happy you liked it.

Thanks! Happy to hear your feedback :)

Those two stanzas were actually separate pieces before. I tried to tweak it a bit, but I couldn't resist combining the two with the new first stanza. Overall I think ...

Much talent for one so young! I feel like you put a lot of effort into end rhymes and for the most part it worked out great. Towards the end ...

I'm so glad you like it. It obviously isn't written like most poetry, but there is a lot of depth to it. Thanks for the comment. :)

Thanks so very much. Your comment is truly uplifting. With my poetry rhyming is essential, so it may be more of a challenge to convey a message of any sort. ...

The lyrical element to this poem becomes very prominent in the middle of it. Shortening the lines right there I feel would subtract from message and overall piece. I love ...

The last stanza is powerful and echos long after you have read it. I feel that the format is just fine for the poem especially for the last line I ...