Phantomofthebasket

Wow. This was a LONG one-shot, but I really liked it. It was funny and it gave a different view on what a possible Hell could be like, since most ...

Hmm, I really liked it. Its very different, which is really nice. To improve it, you probably could've used a bit more detail. Like, when the boy asked his mom ...

Hey, good piece! It is a tad confusing, but I'm assuming you're going to keep going with it, to explain more in later chapters? If not, you may want to ...

Hm. I liked it. Nice job with the circle, as, obviously many-a people have already said. It's especially good for something under 500 words. I can never write under that; ...

Hmm. I liked it. It was very interesting to read and I'm curious as to see what happens next. The only problem, that I saw? Watch your "i". You keep ...

Hmm... this WAS really good. Though I was confused on it. But I think I got it. Cam and Mike are one person, but two different personalities, right? If so, ...

Wow. Nice piece. The child was a bit... too intelligent for being a five year old. He was talking as if he were an adult. What you could do to ...

I really liked this. I liked at how vague you were to WHY he was in jail, yet I loved the descriptions you gave. I really like the ending, it ...

Wow... just... wow. Haha, this is good, as always... =P But as other people had said before me, grammer errors and transitions to other paragraphs need to change. But... VERY ...

Wow. I really enjoyed this! I really liked the word choices and the descriptions were very good. I also (call me a cheater, but all the same...) like how you ...

Woww... This was REALLY good. I know, as stupid as this sounds, I somehow a bit knew that she was going to end up confessing, but I wasn't 100% sure. ...