Perra

I have a complex love-hate relationship with the Twilight series. On the one hand, it made me give up on true love (or, at least, one true love and only ...

Phew! Sorry it took me so long on this second edit! It can take me a long time to type these out, especially if they're long like this. This was ...

Yay, moreness! :D While I like these and have an ever-present desire to hug Ezrabella (*squee*), I must agree with Sam on the flashback. I think you were going for ...

Well, that just will not do. *Edits Wikipedia article* Ooh, I'm such a vandal! Hurrah, Cpt. Smurf! I really can't say why people love the books so much. Maybe it's ...

Thanks for reading Perra!!! I really apreciate it!!! You're welcome. ^-^ And I forgot to mention this: At the end of this, how did Absynthe get out of her cage? ...

You're welcome! ^-^ I like this new one. It gives us some great insight into Agatha's character. It transitions well from an innocent and well-intentioned request (at least, that what ...

“You…” the man whispered. Blood sprayed on her face as he coughed. It rolled down her chin and onto the floor. It was in her mouth. She tried not to ...

The wind howled like a werewolf , really loudly. Yes to that description (well, except for the comma). I laughed for a minute. Love it. i lik dis, dat was ...

This is a good beginning. It's partially well written and kept me interested. You use a lot of passive voice and need to work a bit more on your sentence ...

I luvd dat. dat was gud! >.>

I'm glad I could help! ^-^ And, yes, you did make sense! I noticed the showing rather than telling, as well. But, because it's in first person, I figure a ...

"I said, ANSWER ME!" his voice now a deadly whisper. If he is whispering, then why is there an explanation with capital letters? Gives the impression that he is more ...

Yay! Now, let us partay! *tosses confetti and starts dancing**turns around to avoid stares*(lol!) :P :roll: Seriously! Can't wait to edit it! :wink: :twisted:

Ah! Now it makes sense! :mrgreen: Good luck in the contest, if you enter! :wink:

I'll let them, but I'll try and get away with out much notice. My friend's don't curse, except in certain situations or just one word for some reason.