Periwinkle

I've tried editing the last line; is it any better? I think you should really expand it. Show her cynical, bitter outlook on the fact that this fantasy of hers ...

Opps. I didn't realized yes that's the only thing I've noticed was the first thing. Sorry. :oops: Oh, and good luck on your 100-short story challenge!

Hello! :D Don't spear me, please...but I like the old one better. *hides* Okay, this is still a great piece because you are a great writer but I have some ...

I liked this. Short, sweet, and it had a strong point. I didn't like the end so much. It just didn't seem to fit as nicely as the rest, but ...

I don't even get why authors tell us when the book is coming out months away! Why can't they surprise us with "OMG THE BOOK IS COMING OUT TOMORROW!" That ...

:lol: This made me giggle a lot. It's fun to say "Ploo!" xD

Hey, there! Here's your second review: Crissiphone muttered to herself as she rode on the chariot to the Council of the Gods. She had long black hair that fell to ...