Periwinkle

I. NITPICKS The grass was bright and vivid from all the rain we got , and it grew up to the middle of my calves. Yellow dandelions were sprinkled here ...

I'm not so hot in the poetry department, but I liked this. The only thing I really noticed is the second from the last time you said "Little Raven Black" ...

You've already uploaded five works and haven't reviewed anything. It's against the rules..you need to keep a 2:1 ration of reviews:works uploaded. To review...you have several spelling mistakes in her

I. NITPICKS Joeanna stammered into the hallway, clear and quiet. There's no need to separate the statement into two separate clauses. It should be. "Joenna stammered into the clear and ...

The land was pale l and dull. Just black and white. The people were a dull grey and the roses were white. Yes roses then were also the meaning of ...

I. NITPICKS Keri couldn’t help but notice his well built form. He was at least six and a half feet tall, and a good two-hundred and fifty pounds. All of ...

I. NITPICKS The sharp bell chimes loudly, my eyes fly open in shock. I blink a few times, smoothing out the fuzzy world before me. My jaw feels stiff and ...

I. NITPICKS In the pitch black of the night, a figure stirs in the undergrowth. A tinny voice comes from the shrubs in a strained whisper. Two things, I don't ...

I. NITPICKS Now I can see a little better from the moonlight shining in through the stain glass windows. The rows and rows of bishops and priests were lined up ...

First dibs to the rawness! xD I. NITPICKS The scuffle of my feet on the ground seemed to be the only noise. When I listened more closely, I realized that ...

Two things to point out. First off, your title. I don't know if you did it purposely, but I think you mean "Despair". The last thing...I actually thought this was ...

I. NITPICKS The forest was quiet and the only sound was the child's voice echoing throughout the untamed woods. Her voice weaved through the treetops as the song innocently continued. ...

I. NITPICKS I kicked the blankets off. How am I going to do this? I pushed my self upright, trying to ignore the blistering head ache, and wiggled off the ...

I. Nitpicks A light laugh escaped his throat. This was definitely the strangest of all the names he’d ever been given. With an array of names such as Bob, Fred, ...

I'm here upon request! ^-^ How's life treating ya? I liked this. It was fun to read and the part about having "multiple toothpicks under her command" made me giggle. ...