PenguinAttack

Man, sorry. I'm so tired, I thought it was a prologue. My comments still all stand, except that this is now way too short and we need to know about ...

Oh! That's maybe clipboard. I'm not sure. I can go through and edit them if you like?

Sorry Kafka I totally changed the title on you there - it's "Why?" now. xD I'll add an author's note after I do my last review, but basically this is ...

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You are lovely. I will/do consider "in deep scrub" for the last. And understand the issue with the comma and am thinking seriously about it, I have to decide if ...

They can be melodramatic, but you shouldn't be writing them melodramatically. There are poems that say the same things you do, but better, because they avoid the melodrama. I want ...

The problem, I think, is that however I read this, I just don't care. Poetry, unlike prose, is so rooted in the nature of the human that I feel that ...

Thank you very much. :) There is more to it, but I've yet to write anything fully!

Locking this because it's a double post, you can find more comments on this work here:

Sorry for the double post! At least this one got counted as a review (The other didn't? Weird!)

Hullo IE, my dove. I’m sorry this is so late! I’ve got a bunch of comments down, and I’ll mention again that each line doesn’t have to be capitalised and ...

I'm working on more now. :) Thank you. This is a first draft so I'll be able to include more details later on. :D

I don't think it matters who Lucy James is. I think that what we're looking at is a poem on time. Long enough that the possibility of forgetting the colour ...

Hey Sabre! So you know I love Hercules, and if you don't you should, because I love him. I can see the allusions to the show, to various video games, ...

I have comments about this, for a time when my laptop is charged. Remind me to come back. It's a beautiful poem. The best I've seen from you yet. The ...