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Hi Tale! Okay. I like what you have here, but it needs some work. You’ve got some great imagery, but it doesn’t connect to anything. You tell us it eats ...

Hello there, Sam. ^^ This is a gorgeous little poem, and you've only had two comments? (one being Saintifiction) Shocking! Not to be mistaken, I'm of no use. ^^ I ...

Hi Selene! Okay, to begin, I like this, it’s cute. ^^ Nice work on that. I’m not a huge fan of the dream thing but you use it well here, ...

Hullo there ^^ Now, I must say, your disclaimer almost worked. Considering what I want to say and the possible reaction from you, or others, I almost decided not to ...

Well now, wasn't this just the piece of amazing I told you it would be? ^^ *gloats* I know all the coolest things. Anyway! I find that Line-Flower is right ...

Hehe. Well now, a faster read than the others, but no worse. Alex was surprisingly non-sucky, it was lovely of him to help Lena. ^^ Favourite bit: JAMES I just ...

Hey, Selene! I like the theory of this. The tree growing and shaping. But yes, you need some more imagery! That’s cool, although the new descriptions will alter the form ...

Hey there, Ant. “We float, my dear, we float. And the sleeping caddisfly ventures Ever nearer to the disturbed water.” - I think you might do better to separate this ...

Hi there Kayy-tea. Firstly I would like to point out to you that YWS has a policy of making two reviews before you post any work. If you could please ...

Squee. ^^ That was awesome, dear. I love the mice, those two boys are such girls. I do really like how it came back to it in the end too, ...

Hi there, Echolair. “Love wasn't abolished. It was bloody made in sheer fantasies of bloody unions.” - Here, I can tell, you’re using “bloody” in the sense of the swear ...

Hi Adna! “as you sing on, your melodies so sweet.” - Does this indicate one melody or more? It was slightly confusing. “Every note you sing here casts its spell. ...

Hi there Slyther. ^^ I like this! I think it's cute and for the most part flows quite well. The structure does, infact, help. I doubt I would have liked ...

Hi Toy! Okay! I love this for a character development chapter. It’s clear how you’re developing her relationship to Henry and the rest of the ship. And this is great, ...

“As I walked slowly closer, I realized the man took up the entire space normally provided for about three cooks. I could not see his feet over any part of ...