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Hi Conrad! I’m really glad you contacted me about this! Elsewise I’d have never known it was here. ^^ Now, in contrast to Kylan, I actually prefer the second to ...

It wasn’t thick enough to sit comfortably astride, so very carefully, holding onto the beam that ran above my head to the spine of the roof, she stood up. “above ...

Twittertops! Long time no chat, I think I’ll be brief on this, because it’s very well organised, this piece. On the Sense – very well done, it was well explained ...

I'm always ever-so glad when you post, Braddeh. I'm extra glad because I'm thoroughly enjoying this. You're coming into your imagery very nicely. ^^ I appreciate it both here and ...

Hullo there Icaruss. ^^ Your work tends to intrigue me, so I’m actually quite glad you’ve forced me to critique sommat. Don’t put those flashbacks in italics. While I know ...

Hullo Ma'am Fishy. Well, I'm not really sure what to say, hah. I've never really ventured into Historical Fiction, thanks for the opportunity. Now, I assume that Historical Fiction works ...

Hi Do! Hope you’re doing well. Now, I’ve read the story, and I decided that since all of what I have to say covers the entire story, I’ve just made ...

Hi Jelly! Yet already boxes crowd my space. < “yet already” feels awkward here. Where pictures were never hung. < I’d delete “were” here, it’s cumbersome. Where movie stubs were ...

Hey Tale. I’ll start with some of the little things that I found while reading through the text, a few typos, nothing too serious. She sat at the bus stop, ...

The answer to your question was clear to me. This might be because I already knew of the prompt and recognised what you were doing. I realise that the prompt ...

Oh dear. I do hate to sound like a broken record, which, coming after Jig and Kylan, I might seem. But they’re rather right. I was it coming, and was ...

Aloha, Conrad. Well, Kylan covers everything, doesn’t he? ^^ He’s right, of course, about everything he’s said (I had the good grace to read his comments to make sure I ...

Hey Sureal! You know the weird thing? I had already bookmarked this story to check out, before you posted on my thread. ^^ Sucked me right in, the story. I ...

Minx, I like this second part much better than the first. The use of the light is delightful and I love the dialogue between the boys. In this chapter you've ...

Hey Gadi. We’re watching The Jazz Singer on a Sunday morning, the rain snuffing out any energy in us, the little raindrops thrashing against the windowpane. < To be honest ...