PenguinAttack

Hullo there, jsmith! This is amazingly good. Really, I am completely enamoured with it. I think you start off a little bit slowly, although it fits in beautifully with the ...

Hi there! I don’t think I’ve reviewed you before, so it’s lovely to meet you. ^^ Your poem is, I believe, best fitting a spoken word piece, it’s almost the ...

Hi there! Welcome to the YWS, I’ll just point out first off that we have a 2:1 review to post policy right now, so if you could do some reviews ...

Hey Era, It was a derelict building. An old farmhouse with no windows and one door standing next to a barn that had been caved in by some long forgotten ...

Ah! This was wonderful! I baulked at the idea of doing a science fiction work – Dreamer picked the forum and genre for me. xD – but I was glad ...

Hi guys! I’m just stopping by with a critique or two. ^^ Nice work on actually developing a co-auth, it’s difficult to do in any continual capacity, so kudos for ...

Hi there! I’m here to give you a –hopefully helpful – critique! Firstly, I’d like to say that this is interesting, at its base level. Everyone loves stories of other ...

Hey there, welcome to the YWS. First and foremost I’d like to remind you that the YWS has a policy that when posting a work, the writer must review 2 ...

You need to rate this R for themes if you're going to have things like "nether regions awakening". Remember this for your other posts, if they get any more explicit. ...

Howdy Bertie! I'm so sorry this has taken so long! I've been terribly remiss in my critiquing lately. But I shall make up for it by... telling you you're too ...

A few of the officers exhaled into the faces of passing prisoners, causing them to cough and wrinkle their noses. They didn’t look up, quivering and hastening their pace. < ...

Torn (revised version) If mirrored in one’s face she found the image of the other, < I stumbled a little over “the other” which my mouth wanted to say as ...

Hi, Maki-Chan, I apologise for this being so horribly late. I’ll get through this as quickly as possible and move on to the first chapter. I’ll be writing comments in ...

CastlesInTheSky. Many happy greetings, and a bow, I don’t think we’ve met. It’s lovely to meet you. Now, now, you say, on to the critique! Well, there isn’t much, I ...

Hi Con! I’m massively tired and you already have like bajillon awesome crits on this, so I’m going to do what I can with a general comment. Firstly: Favourite line ...