PenguinAttack

Ooookay, my friend. You've kept the same smooth; easy to follow style as the first part and I like that we can keep the same easy attitude through the whole ...

Niagini! So I know how you feel about this piece, but we're going to look at it very close and hard and make some tough decisions. For the purposes of ...

Hullo Awesome (awyeah) So I like your story so far! I actually noticed that one of your chapters is waiting for a review and decided I'd come back to the ...

Hi RainGrae! So I find rhyming terribly hard, so I feel for your desire to try and express yourself with less rhyme than you usually do, it’s definitely cool to ...

Kafka, Ovular? Really, really ovular? I can't even imagine what her hair looks like. That's my biggest issue with this piece. I think your first line would look nicer, feel ...

Ky, I always want to like your work, even when I have to think about it. I had to to think about this, but in the end I don't really ...

Hi Seastormy, I like your name! Welcome to the YWS and thanks for posting a cute little poem. I like Alice in Wonderland in all its incarnations, although I can ...

Hannahbobannah, my love! I am here to finally review this, my comments earlier were just short and brief and you deserve more of a look! I like that you use ...

Hey Audster, So, this is just delicious and I know it’s from Chu’s prompt. Rea explained that you altered it a little to make it in the eye of the ...

Hannahbobannah, I am finally here and I’ll just leap immediately in and say that I thought I loved this when I first read it. Now I’m reading it again and ...

Hi Daniel! So, I won’t correct your spelling because it looks solid. Your grammar is okay, though your punctuation is absolutely terrible. Punctuation is important because your sentences are often ...

Ugh, Jack, I like this so much. In direct opposition to Gaia there (ilu!) I am way into the periods rocking through the text here. I think they help the ...

Hi Misstoria! I feel like I’ve seen you about a lot but not commented on your work so much? I don’t know. xD This seems like a very sweet poem, ...

Prettyface! You have a very sweet poem here, with the contrasts running through it. But I’m going to be tough with you tonight. This could be and should be better, ...

Hullo Preten, I want to firstly ask about the structure of your poem. I want to ask if it’s on purpose. I can see that the indents make a story ...