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Hi Miss Bethy! cried a woman, somewhere, in a shrill little voice. You used shrill for the nanny, and it might not be really obvious to other people, but it ...

I thought I was going to be able to say I hate you Gautam, but I still hate you even though you are sensibleish here! Also, Noooo, nooo Farah what ...

Hi! Just so you know, Miss Bethy, I’m writing these comments as I read your text, because I think I find my reactions interesting. So let’s not delay! Her nanny’s ...

Hi MissBethy! Effy is absolutely adorable! (with navy blue knickers over the top in case of BOYS). That is the best line ever, I laughed out loud, and smiled with ...

Hi Abelgaiya! This is a cute story you have going here. It is a bit funny and a bit odd and in need of a little bit of editing, but ...

Ugh Gautam, leave her alone! I didn't like Gautam even here, if you remember me saying to you, and even reading backward I can't deal with him. His sulky, unrepentant ...

Hey Hannahbobannah, I thoroughly enjoyed this. It, of course, reiterates how I feel about Gautam and Farah and their relationship. You have such a beautiful way with words and this ...

Hi Spinell, Firstly, I love your name because it makes me think of Recess and I LOVED Recess so hard. Secondly, this is flash fiction and I love flash fiction! ...

Nia! This is very interesting to read set out like this. The difference in form, and in reading seems to have heightened some things for me. I'm really, really digging ...

Hi there, I’m going to start by saying could you try to put your disclaimer and author notes in a spoiler or down the bottom of the text? This is ...

Hey Kafka! So I am a mega fan of puns and word play, so this caught my attention immediately. It didn't keep it though, I'm sad to say. It just ...

Hi Nike! It's good to see the continuation of the last part, it left a lot of thoughts in my head. First I'm just going to say that the one ...

Gautam, you still suck, but in the opposite order cause I reviewed 5 before 4. So here I think shifts in focus a little bit and that's excellent. the previous ...

You are a terrible person, Gautam and I will never love you. Although I love Gautam as a character, Hannah. He is all kinds of intense and has a wonderful ...

Hullo StoryWeaver! This is a lovely little poem! It’s a little clunky in bits and I think you need a look at your wording, but you've got a veritable something ...