PeanutPhoebe

All right, PeanutPhoebe, here to review. Okay, so I didn't really see how the first half really fit with the rest of the poem. It seems like it's more about ...

Once again, I'm impressed!! It just keeps getting more amazing!! Ok, the formatting seems much better, but it still needs a little work. The paragraphs should be split up smaller. ...

Aww!! This is kinda depressing. I love the descriptions! You really paint the picture. However, I would have liked a little more background information. What are they're names? How did ...

Again, great job!! There are some places that are a little choppy, the sentences could probably flow a little better. I'd suggest maye turning some into compound sentences, or making ...

Okay...don't know exactly what to say. I'm a little bit confused, there just doesn't seem to be enough explanation. Why is she in a doctor's office? Is there something wrong ...

okay, this is just a little confusing to me as to how it's about child labor, but it's a good poem! First off, there is a little bit of a ...

Great job!! I would have like some more explanation, like how old are they? why are they living together if they weren't married? also, you said she threw the ring ...

Love it as always!! It flowed very nicely. Great work. There are a couple awkward places. The one that I think is most awkward is "some of them went to ...

Great job!! I can't wait to read some more. Ok, first things first. I did notice some typos in various things. Mostly punctuational. The formatting could be a little better, ...

Peanutphoebe, here to review... Great job!! All three poems were amazing. The only complaint I have on "A Special World" is the last stanza. I don't know why, but that ...

Very nice!! I really like the description of everything in the story. It flows well, and is short and simple. However, I would like a little more background information. Why ...

PeanutPhoebe, here for a review. Very interesting!! This could have used a little more background to it. Why are you saying this to the child? Who is the child? What ...

Ok, great story!! Although I don't think a kid would go through all that just for a few points. I like how you described everything well. Some sentences and the ...

Ok, I've read this already, and told you what I think in real life, but I'm gonna do it again. It flows very well, and just kinda draws you in. ...

You're as bad as Anna at leaving people on cliff-hangers!! (Yes you do, btw, ajruby12) This is very interesting and flows well, for the most part. There are a few ...