Peacockfeather

I wish it was longer, even if it was a short story! It was a little bit fast paced though. Slow it down and take time to explain whats going ...

You forgot to add spaces in many places. I don't know why but that annoyed me a little bit. But other than that it was a good story! Just enough ...

I loved it! It was quite interesting to me! There where however mistakes, sometimes you forgot to add spaces and comas and periods. I think you should work harder with ...

I think this was a well written short story. But I don't really get the whole romantic thing.... Maybe its just my point of view but I think there should ...

It was interesting, but you had a few errors. You miss spelled several things and forgot to add words such as, 'What about the sixth sense miss.?' There was your ...