Paracosm

That was completely mind blowing! I really liked the climatic ending! There weren't any rhythm issues or grammar issues that I noticed. I think this is free verse, and that's ...

This was really great! You did a good job being indirect, everyone knows he killed himself, but you never just say out right. I wish we knew the main character's ...

I liked this as well! Towards the end the flow feels off to me. So I jump, my life flashing (flashes maybe?) before my eyes, as they say it always ...

I really liked this poem! There was a minor typo in the third stanza. Never knowing what I what (want), or when I want it I didn't get the third ...

Could work! Keep fighting and don't give up! God loves you no matter what, you may not have the choice to be gay or lesbian, but you do have the ...

This calls for some tears. I didn't see anything wrong with your grammar, you painted a great image, and I love how you wrote from the dog's point of view. ...

They handled the grammar I suppose, so all I have to say is, try to describe the environment a bit! I tend to have trouble setting the scene, but the ...

Good poem! Loved every bit! The only things I would change, instead of array, I would say disarray, it sounds a bit more despairing, and you used brown twice, which ...

Okay! Great piece! I definitely stayed interested the whole time. the only thing I noticed was a few confusing sentences, and some grammatical errors, but those are minor! Here they ...

Wow! Good job! I enjoyed this poem, and I liked the way you expressed the emotions! The only thing I'd change is the line: Nothing but you I need, It ...

Good job! This story was good, but the dialect got a bit annoying. The dialect was my only problem, the story and this character as a whole was great. Now, ...