The flood of tears

by June3

Published September 29, 2011

I learned your story,
I know how it goes,
You move to a new state,
A new city,
A new life,
You find a girl,
You think she looks pretty,
Then you tell her anything,
Tell her what she wants to hear.
Then,
She goes out with you,
And she'll think she has it all.
But, I've learned your story.
I know how it goes.
You'll lie,
You'll pout,
You'll do whatever you want,
You give the girl hope,
But then you tell her you've had better.
I've learned your story,
I know how it goes.
I used to be that girl.
I thought I had it all,
I didn't,
I was just like all those other girls,
I wasn't all that different,
Except for the fact,
That I acted,
Just,
Like,
You,
I told the jokes you told,
I walked the way you did,
I was you,
And you were me,
But, we had only just met.
I've learned your story.
I know how it goes.
You say you were named after a great man,
Who was told by God,
To save every man,
From the flood.
But, you have saved no one.
God has warned you of no flood.
But, the only flood you have created,
Is the flood of tears.
My tears.
I have learned your story.
I know how it goes.
You shall move on,
A new state,
A new city,
A new life,
And soon,
A new flood.

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samii27
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samii27 wrote a review Review · Sep 29, 2011

At the start of your poem I was thinking "This is just going to be one of those predicatable and obvious poems" but by the end I had changed my mind. It's not one of my favourite poems I have ever read, though it did stir something in me. I found some of it a bit bland and boring. Overall I think you have a hidden talent, you just need to prove that to us readers by writing something mind blowing, not something ordinary. You have a talent and I would like to see more of this talent coming out in furture work of yours.

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Paracosm
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Paracosm wrote a review Review · Sep 29, 2011

That was completely mind blowing! I really liked the climatic ending! There weren't any rhythm issues or grammar issues that I noticed. I think this is free verse, and that's the type of poetry I like, because it gives you a lot of freedom to express yourself. Great job!



For in everything it is no easy task to find the middle ... anyone can get angry—that is easy—or give or spend money; but to do this to the right person, to the right extent, at the right time, with the right motive, and in the right way, that is not for everyone, nor is it easy; wherefore goodness is both rare and laudable and noble.
— Aristotle