Paracosm

Hey there! I'm going to do a quick review. I'll start with technical stuff, like syntax and grammar. All I have is a certain emptiness feeling of sadness. A feeling ...

This was really good, I honestly can't think of much that I believe could be done better. The writing is entertaining and easy to read. I just picked out a ...

Hey there! This was really good. You did a good job guiding the reader from one place to another with adequate description. Your characters are full of attitude. The way ...

Hi there! Welcome to YWS. This was a very interesting bit of writing, and I'd love to see how it develops. Play around with some ideas, and eventually everything will ...

Hey there! Be forewarned, I'm no poetry expert. I'll do my best to give you a good review though. What I liked! 1. It was nice and descriptive. You used ...

The Unicorn Forgot Happiness Alongside Batman Single horn above the bridge, what magic flies within your curvature? Sooth my wound gaping in metaphysical realms: aching to embrace your abrasive cloven

And a tree in town square. Not a snowflake insight. Except out a can. - I don't feel that this stanza should start with And. Palm Trees with twinkling lights ...

Great job! This going to go somewhere great! Maybe you could have her put under investigation for murder, that would be exciting. Would she run and hide, or try and ...

This is a good poem, and I'm glad you found God! Here's all I noticed! All I know is that when darkness is all you have, it becomes a close ...

Wow! This is brimming with awesomeness! I didn't notice much to complain about. All I can say is that I have trouble differentiating between so many characters introduced from the ...

Hey there! I thought for the most part that this was well written, there are some sentences I've picked out that may not necessarily have grammar errors, but that I ...

Wow! This was haunting from the very beginning! You did a great job describing the scenes in a semi-confusing style. It felt like something was going to happen, and it ...

I liked this poem! It was very well written, but the last stanza feels off to me. I would try to use the word you a little less, but it's ...

This was great! It was full of emotion, the thought was expressed well, and it was very edgy. The whole story is full of angst. I just don't get the ...

This was very good! “Where the hell have you been?” She ducked into the alley. -This might sound better if you say something along the lines of: "Where the hell ...