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Hi Truth - I dig that punctuation! I don't really know much about how to use it in a poem, so that's cool advice for me, thanks. Also like your ...

Thanks wondergirl, it was very harsh wasn't it? Some people need a kick up the bum I think ;)

I really like that! That's such a good idea... I don't know why I didn't think of doing it past tense. I especially like that new line remember how I ...

Hi, thanks for that, I'm really chuffed to finally get a decent review on this. I know it needs a lot of work which is why I needed some help. ...

Ok, you are 12 years old...?

Hi, thanks for your reply, and OCD moment. You're totally right about fish, they do actually bleed, but not in the same way an animal or person will bleed quickly. ...

Hi, sorry can you please explain why a poem cannot sound like a letter? I don't find your review strong, and I like it that you get to the point, ...

Straight-forward, not subtle, not metaphorical, no particularly interesting words or descriptions. Ordinary.

What a horrible review, I don't know why you even bothered. Basically, you have missed the point of the entire person. Poetry does not have to be an essay, who ...

Hi, London Calling. Thanks for your comment, I do know what you're getting at re there being a lack of sensory description, basically I'm trying to write a story set ...

Would like to just point out that it is totally ok to capitalise in a poem, if you want to

Thank you for that, it's actually just the beginning of a chapter of a story I'm writing, it's not remotely complete... I just wanted to see what people had to ...

Thank you Ignis, I really appreciate your review. This website does seem really useful, and there is such good quality work on here, I'm really enjoying reading other people's work. ...

Hi Layla, thank you for your comment, some of your advice is helpful and I am grateful for that, but I also find what you've said a bit patronising and ...

I find it unique because it's not like you're trying to copy anyone else's style. The words are uncomplicated, and mainly unemotional, but the whole thing is descriptive and poetic ...