PaperCrane

This flows really well! I wasn't expecting such a deep poem when I started reading, but this one really stuck with me. The rhyming is perfect all the way through, ...

Loved that man, I didn't know we were allowed to post stuff like that on here! I didn't realise at first that the protagonist is talking to himself, but I ...

Love it, really different and cool! I agree you've got too much 'falling' in that one sentence, but other than that I really can't fault it. I also love the ...

Hi Angela, I love this.. it's unique and I really adore Liam's character. He's a complete lunatic, really genuinely insane, I can't get enough of him going "I killed my ...

Beautiful, really really good for your first attempt at non-rhyming poetry. I love the imagery, and the positive nature of the poem. There really isn't anything I would correct, but ...

I enjoyed this story a lot, it's very sad, and I love how in the beginning there is a link to the ending, ie. the comment her mum makes about ...

Hi River, I think your poem has loads of potential, I love the story, and I love a lot of the imagery as well. You can take this or leave ...

As far as I'm concerned, this is really good, nearly perfect. I can't believe it's your first short fiction, because it flows very naturally. I also love how it's entirely ...

This is an amazing, insightful poem. I am really impressed you wrote this even though English isn't your native language - I think that the reason I like the style ...

This is amazing! It is so descriptive, and actually quite difficult to read - but that's exactly how it should be, I think. I disagree with that long review you ...

I like this, and I think this poem would make good lyrics for a song. It's not particularly emotive, for me, but it's very dramatic and the language is really ...

Hi Hayley, I'm giving you a proper critique because no one ever has. I like your poem, but think it needs a bit of work... it is very simple and ...

I like this poem a lot, and disagree with what one person above has said about the stanzas all being about different things - the poem really tells a story ...