Panikos

Hi, Radrook! Pan here for a quick review. First: small comments! I needed to impress her. I really did. Good opening. Hooks me right in. I'm instantly thinking about the ...

Hi, Leafpool. Pan here for a hopefully quick review. I can't really see anything to nitpick apart from a few small bits. He was a grade above me, the new, ...

Hi, SergeantRosie! Pan here to review. First, I'd like to say that this could absolutely be turned into a novel, so I'm going to review it with that objective in ...

Hi, MJ! Pan here to review. I'm going to pick out nitpicks/small comments as I read, so I'll get straight to it. Nitpicks and Small Comments Their leader led the ...

Hiya, Little! Back again to review. Congrats on making it to chapter four. Here's hoping there'll be many more. Nitpicks How could he be so sure his Amber was the ...

Hi, Cub! Pan here to squeeze in a review for you. I don't have many nitpicks because the piece is pretty polished, but I'll just point out the few things ...

Hi, Aleleekhall! Welcome to YWS. I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. First Impressions Straight away I can see where your strengths and weaknesses lie as a writer. ...

Hi, DaggerChild89! Welcome to YWS! I'm Pan and I'll be reviewing your work today. First things first: I really liked this. While there are aspects about it that need ironing ...

Hi, Flumadiddle. Back again to review! Oh man, a Supernatural quote. That brings back memories. I used to be absolutely nuts on that show - like, I-sewed-Misha-Collins-a-toy-bee kind of nuts. ...

Hi, Stormcloud! Pan here to review. I'm not a big poetry writer, but I'll try to do my best to be helpful. I'm going to break the critique down, looking ...

Hi, Lightsong. Back again to review. Nitpicks She definitely would not want to trust Ilami this secret, not unless she thought Ilami was worth it . And somehow, unwittingly, Ilami ...

Hi, ValerieSong! I promised a review and here I am. First Impressions Teen fiction and romance aren't my usual bag, so bear in mind that I'm probably not your intended ...

Hi, Lightsong! Sorry for the wait. I'll get straight to it. Nitpicks Ilami went through the hallway by herself . There's nothing about the sentence that would suggest she was ...

Hiya, Flumadiddle! Pan back for another review. Nitpicks The knocker was looking at me. The eyes seeming to follow my every move. This would work better as one sentence, as ...

Hi, Little! Can I call you Little? I don't know if you've got a nickname. Anyhow, I'm so glad to read more of this lovely story, and I'm sorry it's ...