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Re: Nothingness (edited)
But what If our perceived eternity is just a continuation of the emptiness? That's a very interesting thesis. The question made me pause and contemplate on its importance in our ...
Sep 25, 2010 -
Re: The Romanov (Prologue)
PadrePio's Short Xenical Review: Since prologues do not necessarily contain a plot as further evidenced by your story's prologue, I will not be able to comment on the plot and ...
Sep 25, 2010 -
Re: Harana (Serenade)
It's very obvious from the first time I saw the title that we're of the same race. I remember my mother always used to boast to me how many suitors ...
Sep 24, 2010 -
Re: Dispair
I think this is what they call a vignette; more like a sketch of a "somewhat-funny-but-bordering-on-pathetic" situation/scene/incident. There's no dramatic conflict as what the last poster has pointed
Jul 4, 2010 -
Re: Inflicted
You have a crisp and clear imagery laid out here. Kudos to that. However, no matter how I force myself to recognize it as a form of poetry, your "poem" ...
Jul 4, 2010 -
Re: Banana Split
I chose this poem to read because, well, I like banana split. :D However, I just would like to echo some of the comments given on your poem. I agree ...
Jul 3, 2010 -
Re: Talking to God
This poem is simple enough and the words used are, well, very elementary. But it makes you silent; makes you think after reading it. It has a certain impact and ...
Jul 3, 2010 -
Re: song of summer
I like the imagery portrayed. It's clear and solid and makes me go nostalgic of my past summers. :) However, as the above poster has pointed out, a little tweaking ...
Feb 12, 2010 -
Re: "Sepia" Rewrite
Exquisite writing. There is a lyrical beauty to your prose, making it so much a pleasure to read. You have a unique voice and I admire your writing style. I'm ...
Feb 12, 2010 -
Re: Red Stiletto
delicious, i should say. tee hee! and i like how you managed to handle a mildly mature content in a way that even a religious but uh... somewhat earthly priest ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: The Day I Killed My Love
i love the poem structure, specially the line repetitions. the narrator, however, struck me as two-dimensional; i cannot even empathize with him. there was no further elaboration of what he ...
Jan 26, 2010 -
Re: A Murderer
A good yarn! I love the narration. You have an engaging writing style. And the characterization was really great and I can empathize with the character. However, the ending was ...
Aug 25, 2009
