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Wow, that was quite something! I liked it. :) It was very fluid and soft and the whole meaning behind evened it out with good imagery. It was a lot ...

I'm noticing that i don't need to lay in this frigid pool any longer OK, first this sentence sounds a bit awkward. So, you're in the "frigid pool" and you ...

I like this peice. It sounds bright and all at the same time makes me hungry. I found this to be simple yet full of meaning in every line... and ...

[quote]Walking out of the bathroom and into my living room I glanced past the red velvet couches toward the kitchen, but without much thought decided I would skip breakfast.[quote] This ...

The beginning line has the word trafficked. Yes, you guessed. If it is a word, then keep it. Perhaps there is another cool-looking word instead of "trafficked." ^.^* ? Ha-ha. ...

I love this poem so much. :) I really like the imagery and the strong words that tie together! I'll read your other posts! :mrgreen: , Pacific

I haven't written a review in a while, but I'll try too. I like how you used the details of the setting and imagery to draw the reader into this ...

Hello, I saw a few things that just didns't sound right to me. Maybe I can help. :) About a man who was very smart he was even smarter then ...

The characterization is developedw well :) . I wanted tor ead more. It sounds really good, and uses almost perfect imagery. I'll check out some more of your stories :smt003

This really sounded powerful. Very nice! :smt002 I'll be critique on one thing, oyu said 'thy' too much. Thats all. You did really well, I love it! :) :mrgreen:

That is very good! In seventh grade, I would have never wrote something like that:) That will be in my head all day now, :D Very nice. And thanx for ...

Wow, this is really interesting. I made me wondering what would next... then it ended. It was really nice, you should continue it! If you want to, anyway. :) And ...

I liked your story. I found something etchy in your story. You describe everything and it creates clear imagery and that is good with the details you use. :D I ...

Sitting at the tide’s bare feet You did a fantastic job on this poetry!!! :D This was really good and it was nice that you added a character known to ...

This was super funny! I love how you always have a funny sentence at the end of your short stories. YOu did wonderful, haha! :elephant: :mrgreen: