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This is not a debate about drugs, if you wish to debate, take it to the debate group :)

It was most helpful, Adna-dear! I will for sure tell you when I post something new. And yes, the distraction from her thoughts was most intentional. ;) glad you caught ...

[Edit]*giggles* I do address myself by my full name in my head. [origional] I do address myself by my head in my name.

Using a bit more detail and giving your characters more depth is key. Detail where? I mean it's practical advice, but examples would be helpful here. "More detail" is pretty ...

I thought perhaps by making HER go into her bosses office, I was making it clear that she was in fact at work. Also, the 'oh that Vanessa is so ...

I have a line! Also... why are Bella and Edward in every YWS fanfic?! >.> that is all.

Explanation for the word Goddess being thrown in there is fairly simple. The narrator of the poem would be myself, when I do as for spiritual guidance then I ask ...

As was previously stated, I believe the metaphor is actually a bit obvious. The answer to the question about the question mark; simply to show the near desperation of the ...

I will work on avoiding the word "very" from now on, lol old habit I suppose. I will also work on the emotions of the piece, like I said, I ...

This reminds me of the part in The Chronicles of Narnia where Aslan appears and takes the dragon skin off of Edwin (is that what his name is? The mean ...

I appreciate all of the people that gave a crit... this isn't a piece I am going to change though. See as a memorial piece it's not really about you ...

Chels was a chronic Camel smoker. So whenever any of her friends go visit her it is tradition to smoke a Camel for her, hence the "Camel" scene.

Thanks, I know that I really badly need to work through this whole thing again. I just don't have the time right now... or ever for that matter. (why can't ...

*gigglesnorts* Stephanie Meyer = Bane of my existance. This great though.

Hahaha For those of you that are wondering, I am planning on writing more of this piece, and the narrator IS a girl. Thank you for taking a look everyone.