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First Impressions The first thing that pops out when reading this is the horrendous spelling and grammar. If you're not even going to put enough effort into your work to ...

Again, the main problem with this piece is the lack of description. Sort of a "he hit her, she rolled, he kicked her, it hurt". I want to know more, ...

First Impressions It was raining. Kaylin was sitting on her bed crying. Earlier that day she had seen her boyfriend Alex making out with some other girl. This is a ...

{b]First Impressions[/b] The first thing that sticks out about this poem is how unpoetic it really is. From the language to the imagery to the very basis of the idea. ...

First Thoughts If I were you I would go through this and edit it. Not capitalizing your "I's" and the lack of proper punctuation is not only distracting, it makes ...

First Impressions The main problem that I have with the piece is the repetition of the initial line. I realize that you did it on purpose, but in the long ...

So I read this once, then twice, then three times, and the only thing that came to my mind was this: slow down! It's okay, breathe, and slow down a ...

Well first off, I would like to say that I think your imagery is very beautiful. It's not too extravagant but not plain either. He pulls one knee up to ...

I don't have anything truly substantial to add to this, most of the grammatical errors have been pointed out, however I do have to question the capital letter at the ...

First Impressions To be perfectly frank, the punctuation flaws are a bit distracting from the writing, I really suggest taking a good hard look at basics in punctuation and doing ...

First Thoughts All of these things Andie new best; Minor nit pick, new should be knew. As for the opening paragraph, it's a bit... flat? I think the main issue ...

First Impressions Punctuation, punctuation, punctuation! This poem is begging you to punctuate it properly. It's on it's hands and knees! In all seriousness though, this poem is in dire need ...

First Impressions The first thought I have is that it reads like a prayer, not a poem. The main problem here is that it really *is* a prayer, not a ...

First Impressions The images that you've created give a clear picture, but one stanza in particular doesn't seem to fit the rest. I remember the blood spilling ever so clearly, ...

First Impressions I quite like this piece, the metaphor is great because the reader can input anything that happens to be their vice. You've taken that idea of a cigarette ...