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I’m really sorry to say this read like a winey rant. It’s the whole “poor me” thing that no one really wants to hear. This belongs in a blog or ...

I am really sorry to say that I agree with Cade here. It's not really a poem, more a jumble of words thrown together. The style is interesting, but destracting, ...

Ahh, I do enjoy when people don't just defend their work, but tell all of us that we don't know what we are talking about. It's so funny to watch ...

I really agree with the statement about the Old English, it would be better left out. And I also sort of question the repitition, I can't decide if I like ...

Hi! Welcome to YWS! Onto the poetry. you stare at me with bitter eyes, resenting me for privilege You've never tasted my tears, say i never shed them This I ...

I really like this actually... the only thing I would change is this stanza. "Without a second glance It’s trampled underfoot. We destroy the homes of many, And trees are ...

The first thing I noticed was how much you repeat your self. I think it is very hard to repeat and make it work, unfortunately it doesn't work very well ...

I look at you You are looking at me You look away I look away then again at you ok so first thing I noticed was the use of the ...

I watched them from a far distance in shock, They were flirting and holding hand so I started to walk, " He said he loved me , he said he ...

Ok so the good thing is we can all tell exactly how you are feeling, which by the way can be hard to do. The bad thing is it is ...

The poem is confusing I know because I wrote it. But it isn't terrible like ya'll said. Its just differnent . I agree on some of the critique but not ...

A Small Kid Dream It overlooks a beautiful day we glint in our eyes We can feel the affection, warmth, flavor and we can smell the sea We see ourselves ...

Pretty much what colleen said, she pretty much knows what she is talking about. Still, it was fairly good, just needs a little reworking. I won't go on about the ...

Good points: Your emotion is good, the reader doesn't have to try and figure out what you are talking about. Bad points: The point of the poem was reached long ...

I tend to agree with the "little girl" being creepy. But also i can understand the view of the narrator, when you love someone that loves another it is hard ...