Omnihat

Hi there, Firstly, I love this. I love how it's about what it's about without outright saying it- that is, it's not just 'bad dreams suck', it goes into the ...

I like it. It starts out sweet and then turns kind of sad with a sudden but natural transition. One thing though: You start out with a four line stanza ...

Just as a side note, when you try to get published, don't put copyright signs on your work when you send it in. It is law that anything is copyright ...

Like LittleLionWoman, I at times found this a little confusing, though not too badly so. Namely this line Hating ever more, loathing that time of bliss , I didn't really ...

That's cute. For someone who says romance is out of their comfort zone, you've done a very good job. It is a little cheesey, but that's okay. Romance's are allowed ...

Aww, this is sad in a way. But almost cute at the same time. I like it very much. It's not too long, but doesn't feel too short either, it's ...

Firstly, nice work. I wasn't planning on reviewing something so long, but after reading just a few lines, I found I didn't care. I wanted to know what was going ...

Love it. It's a very, very short prologue, but it in only a few lines it gives you a nice feel to the novel and what it's about, all the ...

Hey. It was set off for the most prestigious and prosperous of the citizens called “The Aisles.” The Aisles began to come into my sight as I quickened my pace. ...

Nice work! The rhyming is good, and you haven't just used a bunch of generic words for it. I love the way you ended it, repeating words from the beginning ...