Published October 5, 2011
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This makes me appreciate having my best friends to a great limit. I think this is a poem that shows how much we should appreciate the ones who love and care for us and we should always cherish our time with them because you don't when you could just lose one close to you. I love, love, love this poem. I wish I could take this and give it to a friend but that would plagiarism lol. Good job and keep writing.
You do really good poetry I'd like to see me of this stuff keep up the good work
This is such a touching poem! I have had an experience like this and i understand the pain that goes through. Its such a terrible feeling, but you have transformed it into a beautiful poem. Continue writing and never give up!
You have just made me cry using a poem!
Only, I agree with the person before me. You need to have a rhyme scheme or no rhyme at all. You've mixed it up a bit. Though, even I did that while writing a poem about my best friend so I can kind of understand why you did it. I have very few nitpicks but I feel ashamed reviewing this because it's so sad. *Bows head in shame*
*Sniff* This was so sad!
Overall, good job! It was a very touching poem and all your feelings were conveyed through it. *Sniff* Tears are still falling out of my eyes. It was amazing.
~HPR~
I like it. It starts out sweet and then turns kind of sad with a sudden but natural transition.
One thing though:
You start out with a four line stanza with the first and third lines rhyming. Then the third stanza is five lines but with still the same rhymes.
Then for the fourth stanza you've dropped the rhymes for the rest of the poem. Maybe the rhymes weren't intentional? If that's the case you may want to change it a little.
But apart from that, there's nothing really that I found wrong with it. Well done.