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Haha, that's good. :)

Thanks again, dbrick. :)

Thanks, I think you read more into it than I had intended, but that's not a bad sign, right? :P

Haha, I'm not even sure where I'm going with it. Yeah, the transition is a little off, but I'm not sure I plan on working with this story much. As ...

Thanks. I don't think I'm gonna work much on this one just cause I did it so long ago, but I appreciate your review. :)

Hey thanks Deanie! And no problem, I've enjoyed your work immensely. :) True, some of it certainly needs a little fixing, I'm not completely sure what I was getting at ...

Yeah, I totally understood that bit. It was very important that he sounded truly upset and distraught. Well, in the Hebrew language repeating something three times had special significance. It ...

Haha, funny thing is, that when I wrote this poem, I was trying to use as many big words as I could... Don't ask how that works.... :)

Not sure if this is right or not, and I'm just guessing cause there was a lot of the poem I didn't get either, but I thought the line "but ...

That might work... thanks!

Lol, we all have that problem. :)

That's kinda what I thought, but I'm not sure how to incorporate that. I would love to review your writing. :)

Really? I kinda liked that paragraph... but I see your point and I'll definitely give it some thought. Yup, the names were nasty, when I can't think of something good ...

Haha, that's good to hear! :)

Lol, thanks for your review.