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Comments in red, Durrie. First things first. Giant paragraphs scare people away. @@ Chop them up. (In fact, I'll try to chop them up for you in this review.) So, ...

Comments in red. Everything Doesn't End Now EDIT: Just a warning..this is somewhat long. Also, there may be parts that seem out of place. This is due to the fact ...

First things first. You might want to chop it up into paragraphs or everyone who sees this is going to run away. I'm almost tempted to. But I'll fix the ...

Comments in red. Formerly posted as: The Man In The Top Hat/Emilie's Diary - Part One This is intended to be part one of a long story. I've just finished ...

Comments in red. Filled with exhaustion, Emily's eyes fluttered closed. Revise. Filled with exhaustion is modifying Emily's eyes here, not Emily. Which makes it weird. A vision swirled through her ...

Comments in red, Scar. Okay. So in most mythology, it states that Hades can't have children...And I've given it away... Oops. o.O Anyways, this is basically about a girl called ...

Comments in red. By the way, your avatar made me laugh out loud. :) Chapter One - Sanctuary The breeze swept his unruly hair away from his face and back ...

Comments in red. (Hi, first off, I'd like to say that I'm twelve, not eleven - the computer messed up. Also I'm new to this so there's almost definitely a ...

Comments and corrections in red. Okay, so I decided to add more to the beginning of my novel. This is a very, very rough draft of it and needs a ...

Corrections in red. Chapter One: I' Dead? No Way! Dead! You can't be serious. How can I be dead ? Wait, but if I'm dead how come I'm still thinking ...

Corrections in red. heya ^^ I'm back 8) after a long long time, a year now I think :( anyways I decided to start working on something, this is what ...

Comments in red. I'm working on getting it self-published This is a true story. Names have been changed for protection of the innocent. For those with a logical brain, go ...

Comments in red. Rated 12+ for violence/gore and very mild cursing. Prologue It was pouring outside that day, the day I first met Melanie. She was just a shadow in ...

Hi TenYo! My comments and edits in red. Mullings of a Failed Musician Extract: January 15th I got a guitar today. It's cheap, and doesn't have an amp, but it's ...

Hi Aldopictions! :D Kara here to review your work! ^_______________________^ The abomination crept slower and slower towards Max. Maybe it's just me, but if the thing crawls slower and slower ...