Nutty

Hah hah! -his smile a line shaped by a sharp pencil- this doesn't sound... right. -The man looked up at the one that had dragged him in, then looked down- ...

....Creepy. I saw a couple of typos. But you can go through and find that. And fix up the italics! it makes it hard to read. But the story itself ...

wow! major authority issues lmao. It was good, just make sure you work on sentence flow. Some sentences need breaks in them, and without them the sentences are hard to ...

This is great! All the nit-picking has been done for me, it seems. :lol: I enjoyed this, it was descriptive without being long-winded (something I hate), and enough action to ...

ARGH! PLATYPUS! *runs around in circles giggling* Why the platypus? Not why the platypus anything, Just, WHY THE PLATYPUS? I think someone was pulling a practical joke when the platypus ...

Ah, maths. Is there a better class to drive your mind into hiding in fantasy? I do thank you, Mr. B for all the inspiration that has come to while ...

I'm pretty sure you meant slender boy not sender boy lol Anyway, I enjoyed this very much! I like it when it goes straight to the action, but that's me. ...

Lukewarm IS body temperature... if you want to get technical. Anyway, it's a good start, but I have no idea whats going on. So, if you continue, I have to ...

Okay, I saw no real grammar mistakes, but matt's better at that then me. This was good, but possibly have a bit more detail. We know it's a castle, And ...

It's not flimsy! far from it. Good twist- not only has someone died, the family is divided. Very interesting. Well written, I like how you have her so opinionated- it ...

Aha! that is one disturbed girl. I like this, and the way you have the one sided conversation is very effective. It shows the desperation in finding something to trigger ...

I thought it was funny! ...Or does that just make me weird? :lol: Very... random. The rhythm was...interesting, to say the least. Maybe it would be better as a flashfic- ...

Heh heh- the drunken street wise man... a woman? Great twist. Very funny. I love Quinn drunk- fun, seemingly senseless yet still not stupid. Very well written. I've just read ...

Whoah.... man. It was good! but... gawd.... poor Tea.... *is wordless* ...Very effective. Very... shocking, but that's good. Shock factor is good in a story like this. I'm not sure ...

great flashback- it helped get a scope on the sibling's relationship. Very good- more about our favorite rogue, Quinn. I enjoyed it. Ah... good thing there's more to read. I ...