Nutty

Ugh....that's a hard question. Here are a few of my favourites- Honoured Enemy- Raymond E Fiest Magician- Ray. Fiest The whole Drenai series- David Gemmel The golden fool- Robin Hobb ...

Hey! I watched him coyly, silently, nearly predatorily. Predatorily? I can't even say that. And as I thought, my spellcheck informs me there is no such word. Also, I don't ...

Hey! Here to review ^^ I was living in a small village, north of a larger one, which in effect probably branched off into a further. Into a further what? ...

The man started locking his door and piling things before it so that it would not open. He closed the curtains, and lit a small candle, so that he could ...

Hey. I see you've got a few in-depth crits, but I guess I will do another ;) There was scratching, biting hitting, kicking and ripping. You need a comma between ...

The view was very beautiful, as the sun was just rising from the east hitting the snow, making a bright, blindingly beautiful glow. It was a strikingly beautiful day in ...

Look, Wait, look even deeper. Replace the first comma with a fullstop. Into the deepest depths of hell, there lies the home of demons. Because of the full stop an ...

Woah. It seems this has already been gone over with a fine-toothed comb. I guess I shall do too. I haven't read the above critiques, (just noted the size) so ...

“Hey maddie, Maddie!” Sarah played “Look at Ruby’s wand, come look!” Put a comma after 'played'. What do you mean, she played? It seems like she's shouting excitedly to me. ...

Okay dokay, after reading all about this story, tis only fitting I read it, No? The night had only just begun. Setharos had already settled down in his room and ...

First off- I wasn't confused at all. I understood the link first time and had no problems from there ^^ I heard Jared open driver’s seat and lean against the ...

Hey! On to the next review. he was afraid it was going to crush 'to crush' doesn't sound right. I would replace it with "going to be crushed." sitting on ...

Hey! Sorry for the delay. Well, I must say- I enjoyed reading this. Personally, I like your style of writing, I wasn't tempted to skim read at all. Well done. ...

Okay well- I'm here to crit. Sorry for the wait >

She stood there, frozen- Her long twig legs shaking. I would suggest getting rid of 'there', it is redundant. Also, replace the '-' with a semi colon- She stood frozen; ...