Nolan

Wow. I get being lazy, but seriously? PAR-A-GRAPHS! Not to mention spell check and grammar check. Have somebody proof read your work-they'll have nitpicks you won't. And, in case you ...

I don't have time to read your story right now, but I will later. I just wanted to say that you may want to watch your names. ZaShwan sounds like ...

I can really dig this. It jives well, and it's got great flow and rhythm. About the only thing i can think of to critique is that you should take ...

i really liked the plot. :D the biggest problem with it was that it had very awkward sentences and phrases. Sometimes they were too short, others were run-ons, etc. Plus, ...

This whole storyline/idea is pretty good, but it's less of a poem and more of an "it" or a "thing," and less of a poem. You might try rewriting the ...

this is really powerful, but seems like it'd be more of a short story. try italicizing "his" thoughts, it'll make it more readable. also, there were some punctuation/capitalization/grammar errors. i'd

you can't delete anything if it's been replied to. about the only thing you can do it erase your text and lock the thread. :\

rofl. i really, really like this; it's hilarious, in a morbid, coming only from knowing a multitude of gay men way. the only things that bothered me were that a)no ...

First off, before you post you should have two reviews done. :D Secondly, I really like this poem. It's kind of akin to some of the poems i write. The ...

Wow. This was beautiful. If someone told me that if you did something hard enough your sorrows couldn't break through I'd believe it. This one little line wields huge power. ...

I'm sorry, but I think we all just got stupider That may seem a little harsh, but this was ...horrendous. On top of the poor plot, there was little correlation, ...

to be honest, i didn't really read it. i just wanted to tell you to be careful about writing this. this, already, is probably copyright/trademark infringement, just for using the ...

this was a nice thought, but wasn't expressed very well. other than a few punctuation and grammar errors, i didn't find any major mechanical errors except for a couple tense ...

man, this story is enrapturing! i really do like it. the only thing that made me slightly uncomfortable was how quickly jonas submitted to thomas and niki, it seems like ...

i really liked this. it was powerful, elegant, and poetic. i don't really have time to critique it right now, but, when i do, i'm coming back. great job. :D